Sunday, February 22, 2009

Don't Judge the Book by its Cover

She was startled by the sound of blaring horns and sirens outside her window. She reached over and peeked through the blinds to satisfy her curiosity: she couldn't tell if the sirens were ambulances or fire trucks in her half-woken state. She was surprised that, by now, she wasn't able to sleep through the sound of the sirens.

The clock read 9:47am. She forcedly swung her legs over the side of the bed and slipped on her bedroom shoes. She'd figured it was a good thing that the sirens had woken her up this early--she was tired of wasting her days away by sleeping.

From the closet, she retrieved her one-point-five rolling papers and what remained of the gram she had bought the other day. She made her way to the wooden rocking chair that she kept in a corner of the room. She picked up the bible that had been collecting dust under the chair, blew off the dust and sat it in her lap. She flipped open the front cover and read, "PRESENTED TO," printed in all caps. "Nellie L. Gardner," written in faded, blue ink. She was immediately reminded of the 3-hour conversation between her and her grandmother that lead to her owning her grandmother's 27-year-old bible. She smiled--only slightly--and began to break down the weed over the words "HOLY BIBLE" on the cover.

She creased the one-point-five at about a fifth of the way up before she filled it--the way she had seen her grandfather do it for years. She rolled it up and moistened the strip at the top edge of the paper to seal it off. When she sealed the spliff off, she held it up to observe; she could tell she was getting better, but she wasn't as good as her grandfather, yet. She blew the residue from the cover of her Bible and set it back under the chair.

She got her matches from the pants she'd worn the previous day. She struck one and blew it out--she loved the smell. She used the next one she struck to light the joint and sat down on her bed.

As soon as she sat down, the alarm went off inside her building. She, in sudden excitation, could feel the perspiration seeping from her pores. The safety strobe light right above the door caught her attention. She nervously put on her sneakers, grabbed her coat and scarf and ran out of the building. With the smoking joint in hand, she'd figured it would be best if she moved, quickly, away from the apartments, especially since she had forgotten to ask if her room was a non-smoking one.

She accidentally flung the emergency exit door open so wide that it slammed against the chipping, brick wall. Again, she was startled. She emerged from the back alley onto Polaski panting. For a moment, she stood, caught her breath, and got herself together. She looked towards the book store as she took a long drag. She decided to walk in that direction--she wanted to see if she could tell what breed the man's dog was.

June discreetly caught up to them and realized that the dog was one of those helper dogs. As she got even closer, she heard the man say, "Heel, Shad." The dog and the man stopped and the man reached down to adjust the dog's harness. June walked around them to get a better look at the dog. As she circled around, she took another drag. The blind man turned his head in her direction and his nostrils began to flare. June stood there and watched the two of them. The man finished what he was doing and stood up straight with his nostrils still flaring. Still, June stood there and waited for a look of recognition to appear on the man's face. She took another drag and inhaled too deeply. She began to cough and the blind man suddenly began making his way inside of the coffee shop. As June stood there watching them, coughing, the blind man turned his head in her direction. He stood there, seeming to stare at June through the window.

It took a few seconds for June to ask herself, "What if he's not actually blind?" Her thought gave her the chills. She looked at her joint to break their stare, took another drag, and made her way to the Pawn Shop.

His head turned as June passed by.

3 comments:

  1. Well written. Your character seems to lack any direction or purpose, although this may be the point. It's still interesting to read. What happened to the man in the alley from the first post?

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  2. 1. This was a very entertaining, and it also flowed well.

    2. I think the character needs to have some kind of conflict, whether internal or external, to create some sort self-discovery. Right now, as you said on the note card, she is content without totally knowing herself. Shake her up a little bit?

    3. How is her financial status?

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  3. So far, I agree with Bob in that there doesn't seem to be much direction or purpose in what your character is doing, but then again, that's how most of us are right now. Try to come up with a main conflict or plot that will make writing about your character interesting and fun. Look for other characters that she can interact with. That said, I think that it was well-written, for example, this: "She accidentally flung the emergency exit door open so wide that it slammed against the chipping, brick wall." I like that image. Is your character a rastafarian? If so, you can do something with that.

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